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PostSubject: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 09:04

This is where I will post any poems or short short stories that come to me. Critique if you wish...

if I can remember, I'll say what kind of poem it is and when I thought of it.
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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 09:14

A Haiku.

At about 9:00AM while showering March 9, 2007

Tears, to shed is life
Bittersweet poison they are
Tears, to shed is death


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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 18:25

I like it, however, arent Haikus suppsed to be 5,7,5?

Just wondering...

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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 19:13

Ying Fa wrote:
I like it, however, arent Haikus suppsed to be 5,7,5?

Just wondering...
you're right, i messed it up and now ive forggoten the actual poem in my head.
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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 19:29

i fixed it, thank you for the comment
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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-09, 19:43

I like it even better now. The flow is much better^__________^

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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-03-23, 11:12

A Techie Haiku I wrote last night to send into ThinkGeek for a chance at a $50 prize. Every month when their newsletter comes out, they choose the best haiku entry and the winner gets $50!

Woe, I lack Knowledge
To learn would be wonderful
Of Perl, I now read
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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-04-18, 08:58

i never liked haiku very much.

T.T

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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-04-18, 11:23

Ying Fa wrote:
i never liked haiku very much.

T.T

Gomen.
i do, its a style I can accually write. XP
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PostSubject: Re: Mike's Writings   2007-04-18, 14:33

They always sound so out of place and choppy to me.

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